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~*Fading Faces*~.......?
From: ~*Memoirs of a Wingless Angel*~
Fading Faces
My blood washed your name from the veins leading to my heart.
No longer shall I drink from the poisonous oasis, filled
with words you use to p acify me with;
My memory knows you not,
and my eyes shall not reminisce upon your face;
My heart shall once again take its throne,
seated upon my sleeve...
Hoping that passers by do not see it mounted,
and tear it away from me;
Roll of thunder that foretells the rain's rall,
deny me not;
Tell the winds to sing my name wrapped in a sullen lullaby;
The skies shall then look upon me,
and in turn shed tears for my sorrowful heart...
Lacrimosa;
~*WinglessAngel*~
Tell me what you all think, please and thankyou
sorry ^_^ it's "Roll of thunder that foretells the rain's fall..."
And "Lacrimosa" means: "This day is filled with tears."
Good, but a bit of a cliche 'depressed' poem. Your punctuation/stanza format needs a little sprucing up. It gets an 8.5/10 for me. Nice descriptions, good use of slightly Old English. I especially like the line about the 'poisonous oasis'. However, again, it's a little bit cliche.
